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题目：Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

话题和题型分类

教育类，同意不同意型

题目分析

一些人认为义务的社区服务应该是高中课程中的必修课，对此你怎么认为？是否同意？

思路提示

同意

义务的社区服务成为必修课，有助于增强每个学生的社会责任感

每个人都是社区的一员，从社区获得帮助的同时，应该做出贡献进行回馈

学习不应该只是死啃书本，否则容易与社会脱节，义务社区服务帮助增强学生在社会中与人

交流的能力，了解社会

不同意

高中生学业压力繁重，义务社区服务占用时间和精力

不是每个学校和社区都有条件为学生提供进行社区服务的平台

As a vital component of high school education, community service should always be a part of the whole educational system. Personally, I could not agree more because not only students but also the whole society can benefit a lot from unpaid service.

（首段开篇摆明观点:高中教育应该包含社区服务）

Admittedly, unpaid jobs for charity organizations take up some of the time students need to spend more valuable time on their studies. Namely, in a short term, this activity cannot bring any reward for the study of those participants. However, people should never judge activities with a short‐sighted view; instead, long‐term perspective becomes more reasonable and smarter. With sufficient social experiences and working skills, students may become more competitive in the job market after graduation.

（从反面让步，后从正面分析，论述更客观辩证）

Obviously, establishing community service as a mandatory part of high school education is not only helpful for students but also meaningful for the whole society. Firstly, both text‐based and society‐based methods make up the whole structure of the high school education. Community service perfectly combines both parts in order to accomplish a better outcome for those students because they have the opportunity to put their newly learnt theories, such as theories of social work, into practice. Secondly, throughout these charitable activities, students can work with disabled people, so they are likely to pay more attention to these special groups and understand them better in their daily life. More importantly, it will shape their strong and independent personalities gradually. Namely, offering help to others teaches the young to understand and support each other in the community.

（从正面详细论述作者观点：学生可以把理论用于实践；学生能更对特殊群体有更多的关注；能帮助学生形成坚强、独立的品格）

In sum, it is a must to add community service to the compulsory education, especially in high schools. Through such service, students can gain both social experiences and working skills that will contribute to their competence. In addition, it is also meaningful for the whole society because students know more about and understand the society better.

（全文总结，再次重申观点）

语言表达

本文论述先从反面切入，而后从正面详细分析，使得论述更客观辩证。语言表达流畅，一系列连接词如 personally, admittedly, however, instead, more importantly 使得行文更加连贯。

Admittedly, unpaid jobs for charity organizations take up some of the time students need to spend more valuable time on their studies. Namely, in a short term, this activity cannot bring any reward for the study of those participants.

Admittedly…可用于论述时表明让步，namely……可用于解释论据。

In sum, it is a must to add community service to the compulsory education, especially in high schools.

句型 In sum…用于议论文结尾总结观点。

逻辑结构

本文是总分总的结构。作者开篇先陈述事实并表达自己的观点，第二段先从反面切入，而后从正面分析，第三段进一步正面论述作者观点，使得论证更加客观辩证。最后一段作者总结前文论述，重申观点。